Cerent's Link Chapter 1 Pg1

I like it! It's interesting and nicely colored, but from a technical standpoint...

1) The two figures are hard to notice at first. You might want to try putting them on a thirds intersection (rule of thirds) to make them 'pop out' more, unless the main subject of the frame is the pretty scenery. I'd also highlight the two subjects more - either make some light reflect off of them so they aren't simply black dots in the sky, or remove the clouds so that they're flying solo and 'center stage'.
1a) Also, in the cut-in frame, they seem to be falling straight downward, but in the large view, they look like they're falling parallel to each other at funny angles. The two frames don't match, dynamically.

2) The colors you used are very casual/normal - not particularly dramatic or expressive, if that was what you were going for. (Having a ton of reds in the sky and water would make is dangerous/dramatic, while using dark, oppressive blues would give it a cold tonal feel, or using a lot of grey coastal fog and clouds would give it an air or mysterious-ness.)
2a) The edge of the coast looks kinda funny where the water meets the land... I think it's the thicker outline that's catching my eye.

As a picture, it's quite good and I like it, but as a comic page, it doesn't flow very well.