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New tails and crushes P6

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its done!!!

this took too long. been super busy with work so had no time to work on this and when i first finished the BG the fill corrupted beyond repair so i had to remake the BG from scratch but now i have so many backups of this thing that it will survive to 3012

anyway

Xan has always had a way with entrances.

Page 1 page 5 page 7[comming soon]

poor Darin

all characters belong to me.

Xan, Darin, H.O.T. © 2012 JLB :iconjlindseyb:

please comment and tell me what you think.
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:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Impact

Not bad! Your artwork and technique has certainly been progressing over the months, and it shows.

A few thoughts I had while reading:
The word bubbles get a little mixed up in the first panel - I went to the second panel, realized there were three characters, and then went back to the first one to sort it out again. Maybe leaving off the dialogue coming from behind the door (replacing it with 'sound lines/squiggles') might help.
I also would have picked a less saturated color for the walls (it distracts the eye from the characters a little,) and shortened the period of falling/punchline at the end (brevity is the soul of wit - I kept waiting for him to fall in the back of my head.)

Aside from that, great work! As always, I look forward to more! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" title=":) (Smile)"/>